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Author: Adonnen Estenniel (alphien)
Title: "Valley of Twilight and Stars"
Rating: PG
Theme: poem
Element: adjective - pale 
Summary: Nan Elmoth's trees look upon the love of two maids and their lords.
Wordcount: 148

"Valley of Twilight and Stars"

I. Nightingale

Fair in figure and face,
Lit with innermost grace,
Lady Melian sings.

Garbed in raiment of Light,
Shod in vestiges bright,
Lady Melian dances.

Pale arms reach sky-ward ever,
Tears fall to flowers never,
Here Melian delights.

Walks tall Elwë, singing
Always the West clinging,
But he now sees her there.

Melian of Light pale,
Soon captures Elf-lord hale;
They stand silent, unknown.

Steadfast couple tarry
With night’gale unwary;
Slow years move in the sky.

II. Deep-night

Clad in silver and white,
Ar-Feiniel rides under murkèd tree,
Where her face desire does light.

In the steady dark night,
Watchful eyes look upon her pale figure;
Love blooms in a heart of blight.

So he takes Ar-Feiniel to hearth
And pours his weighty love upon her,
Yet in turn her soul yearns for sun-sky,

and desire is tempered in Ar-Feiniel’s longing need.

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( 6 comments — Leave a comment )
kayleelupin
Apr. 18th, 2011 04:59 pm (UTC)
Ah...and you compare the ensnaring of Elu by Melian to that of Aredhel Ar-Feiniel by Eol! A comparison I had not thought of, but well-made!

Kaylee Arafinwiel
dreamflower02
Apr. 18th, 2011 06:18 pm (UTC)
Two such different stories, and two such different couples.

I especially like the first part, perhaps because I am more familiar with Melian's tale.

"Slow years move in the sky" Wonderfully put!
blslarner
Apr. 18th, 2011 06:56 pm (UTC)
A fascinating comparison, the mutual bespellment of Elu and Melian compared to the forced marriage Aredhel knows. Well done!
armarielrozita
Apr. 18th, 2011 10:40 pm (UTC)
A rather Tennysonian beauty pervades these verses. They evoke an eerie, ethereal and yet almost sensuous atmosphere of wonder.
someplacetobe
Apr. 19th, 2011 05:24 am (UTC)
I'd not thought of that comparison with Melian and Ar-Feiniel but one well-made in this.
foxrafer
Apr. 20th, 2011 02:51 pm (UTC)
So many lovely lines.

Slow years move in the sky.
this one is a particular favorite.
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