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Author: Himring
Title: A Love Song to Middle-Earth in Spring
Rating: General
Theme: Lyrical Love
Elements: Triolet
Author's Notes: A (hopefully correct) triolet, plus a second triolet-like 7-line stanza, based around lines from Beren's song as quoted in the Silmarillion (but obviously avoiding any romantic reference to Luthien!).
Summary: A song that could have been sung by anyone after the first rising of the Sun, really-- but maybe particularly by Beren himself or by Aragorn, since he seems to have liked the Lay of Leithian, from which Beren's song is taken? (See also end note.)
Word Count: 103




Though all to ruin fell the world,
yet were its making good for this:
the banners of Earth's spring unfurled--
though all to ruin fell the world!--
the bright green of its leaves uncurled,
awoken by the sun's first kiss.
Though all to ruin fell the world,
yet were its making good for this.

Still were its making good for this:
the dusk, the dawn, the earth, the sea!
Still were its making good for this,
unmade into the old abyss
after a time though all should be.
Still were its making good for this:
the dusk, the dawn; the earth, the sea.


End note: I was also thinking of the following description of the first sunrise: As the host of Fingolfin marched into Mithrim, the Sun rose flaming in the West; and Fingolfin unfurled his blue and silver banners, and  blew his horns, and flowers sprang beneath his marching feet, and the ages of the stars were ended.
The idea was to take the basic couplet from Tolkien and add three lines of my own to make a triolet. That is what I did in the first stanza. The second stanza just went and added itself, without any plan of mine; it's almost entirely from Tolkien, but slightly tweaked.

Comments

( 16 comments — Leave a comment )
shirebound
Apr. 30th, 2015 01:45 pm (UTC)
I like that *very* much.
hhimring
May. 2nd, 2015 10:59 am (UTC)
Thank you! I'm glad you like it!
kayleelupin
Apr. 30th, 2015 03:24 pm (UTC)
That's absolutely beautiful imagery. :) I can just see either Beren or Aragorn reciting this one. :)
hhimring
May. 2nd, 2015 11:01 am (UTC)
Thank you! I'm glad you like the idea of Beren or Aragorn singing it!
blslarner
Apr. 30th, 2015 07:19 pm (UTC)
Ah, but well done!
hhimring
May. 2nd, 2015 11:01 am (UTC)
Thank you very much!
dreamflower02
Apr. 30th, 2015 08:39 pm (UTC)
This is utterly gorgeous!
hhimring
May. 2nd, 2015 11:08 am (UTC)
Glad you like it!
Of course, a lot of this is not actually my own, but the idea appealed to me to bring into focus the part of Beren's song that is not about Luthien in this way.
And besides it is finally spring over here!
nessrealta
Apr. 30th, 2015 09:07 pm (UTC)
Lovely!
hhimring
May. 2nd, 2015 11:08 am (UTC)
Thank you very much!
lindahoyland
Apr. 30th, 2015 09:23 pm (UTC)
Lovely.
hhimring
May. 2nd, 2015 11:08 am (UTC)
Thank you very much!
talullahred
May. 1st, 2015 09:42 am (UTC)
It feels so musical and the imagery... wonderful|
hhimring
May. 2nd, 2015 11:09 am (UTC)
Thank you!
It is a very musical form!
huinare
May. 3rd, 2015 12:29 am (UTC)
This is beautiful. I like how you've incorporated some of the stuff from the poem about Lúthien, but made it about something else.
hhimring
May. 4th, 2015 09:36 am (UTC)
Thank you!
It strikes me, now, that Beren's singing about Luthien almost as if she were mortal already (when in fact she's not, at this point)--while I'm thinking more of Arda being transitory as a whole.
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