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Keep Breathing by Wormwood

Author: Wormwood
Title: Keep Breathing
Rating: G
Theme: Pairs
Elements: rise, fall
Summary:  Eowyn and the rhythms of life
Word Count: 100 words (not including the title)

Keep Breathing

When her son was born Éowyn clung to the midwife ...and wailed.
Breathe...let your breath rise...and fall...”

During his first weeks she put her ear to his face in moments of quiet, to make sure she could still feel and hear the gentle ripples if his breathing...through the tidal flow of Faramir’s.

Elboron took his first steps with the wayward grace of infants; flailing limbs synchronizing at the cusp of movement...body projecting forward in precarious equilibrium.
Rise...and fall.

For Éowyn this regular rhythm of everyday life never became entirely given.

“Remember, little man,” she whispered...the trick is always...to keep breathing.”

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( 27 comments — Leave a comment )
blslarner
Nov. 16th, 2010 12:33 am (UTC)
How delightfully you've worked in the prompt! Yes!
wormwood_7
Nov. 16th, 2010 10:56 am (UTC)
Thank you! I enjoyed writing it too.
clodia_metelli
Nov. 16th, 2010 01:13 am (UTC)
Rocking quietly? I can see that. Lovely and rhythmic, this; and lovely to see Eowyn imparting wisdom to her offspring. Thank you, as ever, for sharing!
wormwood_7
Nov. 16th, 2010 11:18 am (UTC)
Thank you! I hope that this doesn't read as pure domestic idyll though. Eowyn is acutely aware that life is not a given thing. (That sounded terribly serious, I think I need to lighten up)
Thanks for your lovely comment, as always:)

Edited at 2010-11-16 11:30 am (UTC)
labourslamp
Nov. 16th, 2010 03:19 am (UTC)
I liked how you punctuated the entire drabble with breaths, reinforcing the motif on yet another level. Well done!
wormwood_7
Nov. 16th, 2010 11:34 am (UTC)
Thank you! I am glad you liked the rhythmic quality of this. I really enjoyed writing it.
dreamflower02
Nov. 16th, 2010 03:26 am (UTC)
I love the way you picture Eowyn in her motherhood.

For Éowyn this regular rhythm of everyday life never became entirely given.

No, I can see that she'd never take the mere act of breathing, of living, for granted.

wormwood_7
Nov. 16th, 2010 11:46 am (UTC)
No, I don't think she would ever take these things for granted. I am really pleased you enjoyed this :) Thanks for reading!
curiouswombat
Nov. 16th, 2010 01:14 pm (UTC)
Yes - I can see breathing not being a given from Éowyn's point of view...
wormwood_7
Nov. 16th, 2010 10:06 pm (UTC)
I am glad you felt this was believable for Eowyn. Thanks for reading and commenting :)
thunderatiger
Nov. 16th, 2010 01:49 pm (UTC)
Given everything Eowyn's lost, I find it very plausible that she would focus on life's essentials, AKA breathing. It definitely wouldn't be something she would take for granted, having seen it stop too many times. I like the way she constantly reassures herself that her son is breathing. Constants are another thing that Eowyn didn't seem to have many of, and I like the way you worked this idea in.
wormwood_7
Nov. 16th, 2010 11:42 pm (UTC)
Constants are another thing that Eowyn didn't seem to have many of.
No, I don't think she did, so I am glad you like the way I have used the idea. Thanks for reading!
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wormwood_7
Nov. 16th, 2010 11:44 pm (UTC)
Thank you! Yes, I felt it was very Eowyn. Glad you agree:) Thanks for reading!
lindahoyland
Nov. 17th, 2010 12:39 pm (UTC)
Just lovely and very true to life.
wormwood_7
Nov. 17th, 2010 01:26 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I am glad it felt true to life, as a little bit of real life experience was used. Thanks for commenting!
paranoidangel42
Nov. 17th, 2010 04:17 pm (UTC)
I like how you've got your elements in here multiple times - it refers to all sort of little things within life, as well as life itself, especially for Eowyn.
wormwood_7
Nov. 17th, 2010 06:57 pm (UTC)
I am glad to hear you say that. That is exactly what I was trying to convey. Thanks for commenting!
antane
Nov. 17th, 2010 11:12 pm (UTC)
Sweet! That shieldmaiden has come far.

Namarie, God bless, Antane :)
wormwood_7
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:34 pm (UTC)
Thank you! And sorry about the late comment. Eowyn has come far, and learnt a few things about life. Thanks for reading!
keiliss
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:24 pm (UTC)
Beautiful, as always. And very true to life. What young mother hasn't leaned close to reassure herself her baby's breathing, what mother ever takes life and safety completely for granted? How much more important it would be for a woman who has come so close to death herself.
wormwood_7
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:46 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I used some real life experience here, so I am glad it feels genuine. Eowyn knows the fragility of life only too well. I don't see her as endlessly consumed by worry, just appreciative of what she's got. Thanks for reading :)
mrowe
Nov. 20th, 2010 05:07 pm (UTC)
It's a hard path she walked to come to that lesson...
wormwood_7
Nov. 20th, 2010 08:17 pm (UTC)
So it was. Bit the fact that she lived to learn it made it an uplifting story in the end. Thanks for reading and commenting :)

Edited at 2010-11-20 08:18 pm (UTC)
someplacetobe
Nov. 26th, 2010 02:29 am (UTC)
You encompassed the prompt so beautifully in this! She's quite right: the trick is always to keep breathing.
wormwood_7
Nov. 26th, 2010 09:58 am (UTC)
I am delighted my use of this prompt appealed to you. A bit of real life experience went into this. Thanks for the lovely comment!
foxrafer
Dec. 11th, 2010 05:04 pm (UTC)
This is gorgeous; such a beautiful and skilled use of the prompts.
wormwood_7
Dec. 13th, 2010 08:12 pm (UTC)
Thank you! Delighted you enjoyed it :)
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