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Taste by Nath

Author: Nath
Title: Taste
Rating: G
Theme: pairs
Elements: sweet, sour
Summary: The taste of victory is not what Elrond expected
Word Count: 100


Victory should be sweet, not this hollow feeling that was akin to defeat, Elrond thought, bidding a relieved farewell to the land where they had fought and died for close to ten years. Sauron was defeated, but the price at which that victory had been bought might yet turn out to be too high, for Gil-Galad was dead, and Elendil and his son Anárion, and Oropher of Greenwood, and too many others to count.

Elrond’s mood turned even more sour as he glanced at the camp of the Númenoreans. Isildur had rejected his counsel and kept Sauron’s Ring. Weregild indeed.

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blslarner
Nov. 16th, 2010 12:46 am (UTC)
Excellent use of the prompt! A sweet victory soured by losses and poor decisions. Yes, I can see this indeed!
mrowe
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:53 pm (UTC)
Thank you:) Indeed, what if Isildur had listened...
clodia_metelli
Nov. 16th, 2010 01:02 am (UTC)
This captures that moment so precisely, a sourness and pyrrhic forebodings instead of good feeling and the exhilaration of victory. Lovely, thank you!
mrowe
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:52 pm (UTC)
and thank you for reading!
labourslamp
Nov. 16th, 2010 03:43 am (UTC)
Ouch... This really sets the stage for the "long defeat" of the Elves in the Third Age. When I first clicked on this I immediately thought of Elrond before he sailed, losing his daughter, but this is so much more powerful--the sacrifice really does seem too high, given Isildur's choice, and Elrond has so much still to suffer*...

*I mean that more in the old sense of the word--submit to whatever Middle-earth throws at him!
mrowe
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:52 pm (UTC)
I did toy with the end of the Third Age as well, but the image here was much stronger. Thank you:)
dreamflower02
Nov. 16th, 2010 03:55 am (UTC)
Ooh. Ouch. Yes indeed, a victory both sweet and sour. And we know how much more there is to come.

It shows more than anything how strong Elrond truly was.
mrowe
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:50 pm (UTC)
I suspect he spent the first half of the Fourth Age quietly gibbering, once it was all over...
ellynn_ithilwen
Nov. 16th, 2010 09:40 am (UTC)
Yes, that victory was really a sad one - so many good people died. :(
Nicely done.
mrowe
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:49 pm (UTC)
Even if not quite for nothing - losing would have been worse though;)
azalaisdep
Nov. 16th, 2010 09:59 am (UTC)
It was such a bitter victory; all that foreboding in the last line.

(Query: should "council" in this case be "counsel"? - I always thought the Council of Elrond came rather later... ;-) )
mrowe
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:41 pm (UTC)
Thanks, and good catch:)

*rushes off to edit*
thunderatiger
Nov. 16th, 2010 01:32 pm (UTC)
I like the contrasts you pull out in this. A lot of this dwells on the sour, but there is that quick, fleeting relief as Elrond gets to leave Mordor behind. But it's overwhelmed by the price of that withdrawal, and there is a lot of dark foreshadowing in that last line. It gave me chills.
mrowe
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:48 pm (UTC)
Thank you. Glad it chilled you:)
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mrowe
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:45 pm (UTC)
Thank you:)
lindahoyland
Nov. 17th, 2010 12:26 pm (UTC)
I liked this very much. Poor Elrond's troubles are just beginning.
mrowe
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:45 pm (UTC)
Lucky for him he doesn't know that yet.
wormwood_7
Nov. 17th, 2010 01:38 pm (UTC)
This was a fateful victory indeed. Thanks for sharing :)
mrowe
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:42 pm (UTC)
... and thank you for reading:)
paranoidangel42
Nov. 17th, 2010 05:01 pm (UTC)
Poor Elrond. It was a bittersweet victory all round.
mrowe
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:43 pm (UTC)
...and getting worse for a long time before things look up

LOL at icon
antane
Nov. 17th, 2010 07:46 pm (UTC)
That would have been a bittersweet moment for Elrond, much more bitter than sweet, the victory tarnished by the defeat that came afterward.

Namarie, God bless, Antane :)
mrowe
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:44 pm (UTC)
Thank you. Just as well for him that he doesn't know in detail what is coming.
pearltook1
Nov. 17th, 2010 09:50 pm (UTC)
A very powerful piece, Nath! Good use of your words and great expression of mood! Very well done!
mrowe
Nov. 20th, 2010 03:44 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
keiliss
Nov. 20th, 2010 04:09 pm (UTC)
Victory like ashes in the mouth, especially with the menace implicit in Isildur's decision. Wonderful sense of foreboding.
mrowe
Nov. 20th, 2010 04:39 pm (UTC)
Thank you:)
someplacetobe
Nov. 26th, 2010 03:35 am (UTC)
My first thought for 'sweet, sour' is food so, for me, the 'sweet, sour' of battle never occurred.

How well this story fits the prompt and how bitterly the victory must fall, sweet though in many respects it is.
mrowe
Nov. 27th, 2010 08:38 am (UTC)
Food was my first thought as well, but the muse ruled otherwise...
Thanks for reading:)
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