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Ode to a Hopeless Love -- by Larner

Author: Larner
Title: Ode to a Hopeless Love
Theme: Poem
Element: a star
Beta: Lindelea
Author's Notes: For RS for her birthday.
Summary: After the Fellowship left Rivendell, Bilbo found this poem secreted behind a drawer in the room in which Frodo had slept. Apparently the Ringbearer found his heart unexpectedly stirred.
Word count: 291

Ode to a Hopeless Love

(found by Bilbo after the Fellowship left Rivendell)

She walks in beauty like the night!
Pretentious words! They just aren’t right!
How I worship from afar
the beauteous Arwen Evenstar!
Now, there’s a sentiment trite and callow
from one whose heart has long lain fallow.
I sound the veriest shallow youth.
How to speak my heart’s sweet truth?
For she’s an Elf and I a Hobbit.
I see her and my heart will throb! It
seems my loves are doomed to fail.
It’s best my thoughts I not unveil.
But is it love or merely fancy?
It’s not as if there were a chance she
would give a thought to such as me,
who’s bungled things so thoroughly.
A wand’rer now, my home abandoned,
a quest to take me to a sad end—
or so it seems. What can she see
beyond the one who draws her pity?

But if I could my love but tell,
I’d speak of sweet Undómiel!
And with ev’ry attempted verse
my writing grows but worse and worse!

She smiles, and stars rise in the sky.
She sings, and not an eye stays dry.
Oh, Frodo, best put down thy pen
before it proves to be no friend!
Leave poetry to others who
can weave words far more sweet than you.
No, not for you the Evenstar,
nor Pearls, nor flowers in a jar.
Your dreams, you know, are too oft foul,
wicked enough to make one howl!
Nay, if you would see her stay untainted,
best she not dwell on heart dark-painted
with bloody images of pain and death,
quite enough to stop one’s breath.

Yet I would love you, Arwen, queen
of my heart—if only it might have been!


( 23 comments — Leave a comment )
Apr. 18th, 2011 03:15 pm (UTC)
I like this. I like the style you used and the poem itself. The end reminds me of a couplet by Thurber:
Of all the words on land or sea,
The saddest are these: It could not be.
Apr. 18th, 2011 07:03 pm (UTC)
I know that couplet well, and both Lindelea and I thought of it for the ending. Thanks so very much!
Apr. 18th, 2011 04:56 pm (UTC)
Alas for Frodo. But I think Arwen, too, loved the Ringbearer in her own way; certainly not the same way she loved Aragorn, but still, I think she cared for him deeply. :)
Apr. 18th, 2011 07:02 pm (UTC)
I am certain that Arwen held a love for Frodo also, but not romantic love. Alas that for Frodo this was the only love he accepted in the end!
Apr. 18th, 2011 06:13 pm (UTC)
I like this. I can see Frodo as prone to "courtly love"-- love for an unattainable object, whom he can worship from afar.
Apr. 18th, 2011 07:01 pm (UTC)
Ah, yes, courtly love he could entertain. I so wish at times he'd known more, of course.
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Apr. 18th, 2011 07:37 pm (UTC)
I know, Mews--this must have been so very painful!
Apr. 18th, 2011 08:49 pm (UTC)
Oh my, poor Frodo. He certainly was dazzled by her at the feast, and it would be natural to try to put his emotions onto paper.
Apr. 19th, 2011 06:17 pm (UTC)
And so I also thought, Janet. He does have a love of beauty and, I suspect, a tendency toward the romantic. That he would find Arwen's beauty fascinating as well as dwelling on the unrealistic nature of his desire seems very likely--and, like Bilbo, he does tend to write things out. Thanks for the comments!
Apr. 18th, 2011 10:46 pm (UTC)
This was cleverly done, I thought. The juxtaposition of Frodo's stream of consciousness in italics and the actual content of the verse was wonderful. A very insightful view into Frodo's thoughts and on unrequited love.
Apr. 19th, 2011 06:21 pm (UTC)
Oh, I'm so glad you think so! I'm not a natural poet, and it takes me far longer usually to get a poem written properly than a story. That opening line from the sonnet has been plaguing me for weeks, so it was wonderful to find a place for it in this challenge poem.
Apr. 18th, 2011 11:00 pm (UTC)
Ahhh, so I'm not the only one who sees Frodo as having been smitten with Arwen! Cleverly rendered here, a juxtaposition of trite sentiments with his true feelings. Both sad and humorous at once.

Apr. 19th, 2011 06:23 pm (UTC)
Oh, I've long suspected that Frodo coveted his friend's bride! Heh! This has been one of the themes I've written to a few times. And I can so see Frodo being so hard on himself for a natural attraction.
Apr. 18th, 2011 11:27 pm (UTC)
Oh Larner this is so beautiful! How could I have missed this (i haven't been very good with keeping up with LJ let alone the community challenges)!

when I saw "for RS birthday" I got so excited! Then while reading it the excitement turned into pain. This is just so personal. There's nothing more painful than unrequited or unattainable love...and you've captured it.

"Now, there’s a sentiment trite and callow, from one whose heart has long lain fallow." --My heart is breaking! Oh Frodo, if you've only known "romantic love".

Thank you so much. It's such wonderful birthday present. I Love it.
Apr. 19th, 2011 06:27 pm (UTC)
You didn't exactly miss this, particularly as it was just unveiled yesterday morning. Am so glad you like it!

I know it's not involving Arwen in her newer role as Queen of Gondor, but I thought of you as I posted it. And there was little chance for Frodo to know proper romantic love once the Ring came to him, I suspect.

Hope your birthday was wonderful.
Apr. 19th, 2011 05:09 am (UTC)
Poor Frodo!
Apr. 19th, 2011 06:28 pm (UTC)
I agree, Someplace. He missed out on a good deal, although he certainly was able to experience things most Hobbits could barely imagine. Thanks!
Apr. 20th, 2011 02:30 pm (UTC)
I really like this. The kind of inner dialogue he has with himself through verse is great.
May. 19th, 2011 10:00 pm (UTC)
I see I didn't get to all of last month's comments! I'm so glad that this inner criticism worked so well for you and others. I know there are times when I'm trying to write I look at the phrases I'd thought of and just shake my head, and I can see Frodo doing much the same.

Thanks so!
Apr. 20th, 2011 07:38 pm (UTC)
If you've read some of my challenge fics, you know my views on Arwen/Frodo. ;) It's something I long danced around, and finally dove into with wild and reckless abandon.

You have no idea how much this poem delights me, with that in mind. . . . :D Thank you for sharing it!!!!

*hugs joyfully*
May. 19th, 2011 10:02 pm (UTC)
And if you've read some of my longer works, you know that my version of Frodo is as besotted by Arwen as Gimli was by her grandmother! Although Frodo kept his own fascination as private as he could....
Apr. 28th, 2011 05:45 pm (UTC)
Greetings! That's one besotted hobbit! I imagine she had that effect on a lot of people. But Frodo did know her love, even if not romantic. Her love was much higher and holier - if I could use that term - than the romantic, shown in the gifts she gave him in honor of his sacrifice. Love also the way she held him and prayed over him in the movie. If that's not love, what is?

Namarie, God bless, Antane :)
May. 19th, 2011 10:04 pm (UTC)
She gave to him what grace she could, which is definitely an expression of love, even if it was not the type of love he might have preferred at the time. Thanks so, Antane!
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