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Musings, by firechild

<b>Author:</b>  firechild
<b>Title:</b>  Musings
<b>Rating:</b>  PG
<b>Theme:</b>  Think Outside the Box
<b>Elements:</b>  knift, sunny, spry
<b>Author's Notes:</b>  In-voice, so probably not so easy to read.  
<b>Summary:</b>  Never send a horse to do a pony's job.
<b>Word Count:</b>

I dun’ know the fella what holds m’ rope; seems a decent sort, though, they all do. Know ‘is horse—‘s called Merethorn, an’ he c’n put away th’ oats like nothin’. Nex’ ta Merethorn goes Sunny wit’ ‘er hay-love Egarim, an’ ‘round me I see Ixoye an’ Fellstar an’ Tremor an’ the others. They don’ say nothin’, but they give me nods, an’ I know we’ll be talkin’ up th’ day later. I ‘ave missed ‘em, m’ mates from the stables. Their riders’re kindly, too; quiet-like, though, t’day.

Somethin’s up. I c’n see easy ‘nough that Himself isna farin’ s’ good—I go riderless, an’ he shares seat an’ talk wit’ the horse-eared one on Arod. Now, ya see as Himself’s getting’ hisself yawed at for one thing’re ‘nother pret’ regular, but I know how it really is; Himself’s good folk, f’r sure an’ certain, an’ ‘e’s here ‘cause ‘e’s lookin’ out f’r a friend, th’ sunset-maned one what talked wit’ the two-leg chief an’ can’t seem ta settle now. Himself hasn’ done nothin’ yawish t’day, an’ he’n Horse-Ears look ta be plannin’.

Th’ other fella, now, ‘im I can’t figure. T’ain’t nothin’ makes good sense ‘bout that one, nor ‘is minder; th’ minder, ‘e treats th’ younger fella like ‘is foal, an’ if’n I know m’ oats an’ coats, that foal’s in f’r th’ yawin’ o’ ‘is life. ‘M not sure th’ poor idjit knows it, neither. ‘E will, though; minder’s go’ eyes what cut through yourself easy as a knife, an’ it’s jus’ good tha’ ‘e looks at Himself wit’ respect, else I’d hafta be doin’ some kickin’, an’ no mistake.

‘M enjoyin’ th’ walk back, but ‘m pret’ sure th’ two-legs ain’t. ‘S a beautiful day, what’s got me feelin’ downright spry, an’ ‘at’s somethin’ don’ happen back in th’ Shire. We stop f’r rest an’ nibbles more’n I’d expect, an’ pay the big horses no nevermind, it’s nice ta not hafta run if’n we don’ wanna. All th’ same, though, I’ll be gladder’n a mouse in a milk bucket ta be back in m’ stall. An’ if’n I’m th’ only one what is, well, that’s a’right b’ me—let these young two-legs’ get theyselves nipped but good, an’ th’ horses’ll h’ve more time f’r bein’ friendlike. ‘S’all good.


( 11 comments — Leave a comment )
Oct. 17th, 2011 01:15 pm (UTC)
It's difficult to use dialect effectively and still propel a story forward. I think you succeeded in most aspects of this and congratulate you for the attempt.

- Erulisse (one L)
Oct. 19th, 2011 04:55 am (UTC)
Er.... thanks. I have a feeling that I should have watched the beginning of My Fair Lady again before writing it, but I was just determined to get something out.
Oct. 17th, 2011 01:30 pm (UTC)
I quite enjoyed reading from this point of view!
Oct. 19th, 2011 04:57 am (UTC)
Thank you! I'm not sure whether I'd do him again, but it was an interesting experiment. Not-Bill is a character in one of those stories that was meant to be a couple of pages and is now well over 40 and still not finished.
Oct. 17th, 2011 10:36 pm (UTC)
Well done Sparx, gwathel-nin. *hugs* Ponyish POVs are hard to do...I don't know that I could pull it off!!! You did well, and I salute you. (Thank you for your help with Rushy...he was proving as difficult as the pony! silly Maia...oh well! It all came together for us in the end!)

I'd love to see more pony POVs from you!

*hugs more*

Oct. 19th, 2011 04:58 am (UTC)
Thank you, tithen-bubz! *hugs*
Oct. 18th, 2011 03:34 am (UTC)
Great job. I read it through twice.
Oct. 19th, 2011 05:04 am (UTC)
Thanks. LOL, yeah, sorry about that, I'd have to read it repeatedly, and I wrote the thing! Maybe I should not quit my day job.....
Oct. 19th, 2011 05:20 am (UTC)
No worries! I enjoyed the way that you were able to write in a dialect from a completely unexpected perspective and still suggest a scene.

The one that comes to my mind is Bilbo and the elves coming to pick up Frodo on their way to the Havens.
Oct. 20th, 2011 01:36 am (UTC)
Oh Bill! I do love seeing his POV!
Oct. 20th, 2011 01:45 am (UTC)
Heh. Thanks! It's actually Not-Bill, but I'm glad that I didn't hash it up so badly that you couldn't make the connection.
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