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Just a Thought by nancylea

Title: just a thought
Theme: august challenge
Elements: seven, oblong, grey
Author's Notes: well,...
Word Count:487


Version A:
Trudge up seven, dreary flights of cold grey stone steps, stretch to reach the handle of the tomb-like oblong door, and the whole way all you can whisper is that my master is dead. You are a lying chunk of cheap gold. Bet your not even ten carats. I’m going to get him back.

Version B:
Saruman called for a meeting of his captains. He had received his newest challenge. Going into the conference room he wrote on the white board:”Seven-grey-oblong.”
S: Alright now what do I do with these choices?
Minion #1: What is choices, boss? Do we get choices?
S: I’ll let you know when you get choices. Now sit down and shut up.
Minion #2 walks in carrying a tray with a carafe and one water glass. He sits it in front to Saruman.: cook said to tell you he was running low on fingers for sandwiches for tea today; says you forgot to order them last week.
S: I FORGOT!!!!! Well, did you kill him for that?
Minion #3: No, he let me throw him to the wargs: alive. What a treat.
Minion #5, 6, &7 come in a quietly sit at the table.
S: Where’s #4?
#6: You killed him last week for eating the last washerwoman.
S: Oh, yes, I remember… did we replace her yet?
#7: Not yet. No one has gone foraging since then.
S: Well on to business. We need seven some things, something grey, and something oblong.
Minion #8 walks in as Saruman is speaking. He pulls his machete out and starts hacking off sides for the table: Look, seven of us. An oblong table and you.
S: might I remind you I am Saruman the white.
#8: Not any more. The orcs decided to do your laundry.
I slide deeper into the shadows; I hope he continues to forget poor ole Wormtongue.

Version C:
Conference room, no table—just chairs, chalk board with writing:
#of dwarfen forefathers therefore the
#of tribes of dwarfs therefore
#of dwarfen gift rings [one per tribe}
#of layers in M.T. therefore the
#of gates in M.T. therefore the
#of towers on around seventh tier of M.T. [tower of Ecthelion must remain independent]
Reclining on the couch under a grey army blanket, a man; looking more like an oblong package left by the giant spiders of Mirkwood: Now, what else can I make seven of?

Version D:
I listened as carefully as I could when the story started but I must admit I lost the thread sometime ago.
“… and there on the seventh level of Moria-- the Chamber of Mazarbul … I knocked a tiny little pebble into the well …we found this oblong dell where we could catch our breath…and now they gave us these nice grey cloaks in memory of Gandalf…”
And I thought de-bunking the Mirror was hard.


( 24 comments — Leave a comment )
Aug. 11th, 2008 10:01 pm (UTC)
These are great Nancylea. The second one had me giggling. Sensible fo Grima to stay quiet!
Aug. 11th, 2008 11:32 pm (UTC)
i worried that i took it to lightly.
Aug. 12th, 2008 07:10 am (UTC)
Too lightly? No it is nice to see a different take on it. A few other Authors have done 'fun' or 'light-hearted' stories. I enjoy the tongue in cheek approach.
Aug. 11th, 2008 11:12 pm (UTC)
Nancy Lea, this is absolutely wonderful. Surrealist Tolkien. You used your prompts wisely.

- Steff
Aug. 12th, 2008 12:21 am (UTC)
i'm not sure wisely but definitely well used.
Aug. 11th, 2008 11:31 pm (UTC)
These have such a surreal quality to them! I love the one about Grima!
Aug. 12th, 2008 12:21 am (UTC)
does surreal mean the haunt my dreams?
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Aug. 12th, 2008 12:34 am (UTC)
my first reply may have been a bit abrupt, let's try this again.

the mirror= Lady Galadriel, she may have the ablity to read peoples mind but most of my reading seems to point to the fact that even those who know them intimately admit the tooks think, talk and act in very different ways;i thought she might feel a little storm tossed while browsing in pip's grey matter.
Aug. 12th, 2008 12:12 am (UTC)
Heh. Interesting--I love the different versions.

Aug. 12th, 2008 12:23 am (UTC)
i like your kid-let. is he real and will he get a chance to grow all the way up?
Aug. 12th, 2008 12:32 am (UTC)
Thank you! And I certainly hope so, as he's not destined for much, just to sail in and save the day and take the throne to usher in the Age of Man. ;) I couldn't find a good way to name her in the vignette....
Aug. 12th, 2008 12:39 am (UTC)
okay, i'm lost. i was referring to your friend in the palm of your hand. where is your vignette? now i need to find myself.
Aug. 12th, 2008 12:41 am (UTC)
That second one had me laughing out loud!
Aug. 12th, 2008 01:14 am (UTC)
made my day. seems most people got them in the mood they were meant to give.
Aug. 12th, 2008 03:32 am (UTC)
I agree with Harrowcat--Grima was wise there.

Thanks for the giggles.
Aug. 12th, 2008 03:48 am (UTC)
wise, maybe. i think he's hoping for invisible.
Aug. 12th, 2008 04:34 am (UTC)
These were great, nancy! Very creative use of your elements :)
Aug. 12th, 2008 04:54 am (UTC)
creative----i like that. now tomorrow's is serious.
Aug. 12th, 2008 04:54 pm (UTC)
Very different!
Aug. 12th, 2008 09:32 pm (UTC)
thank you
Aug. 16th, 2008 11:34 am (UTC)
Well done...

And, umm, giggle:
S: might I remind you I am Saruman the white.
#8: Not any more. The orcs decided to do your laundry.
Aug. 16th, 2008 08:04 pm (UTC)
hard to keep those whites so white....
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Aug. 19th, 2008 08:45 am (UTC)
just a little lite humor. thank you.
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