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Two poems for April Challenge

Author:Virtuella
Title: Simbelmynë/Falls of Rauros
Rating: G
Theme: Beauty of Arda
Elements: believe-receive



Simbelmynë

Pale bloom of sorrow
Cloth that you weave
On this green meadow
Teach me to grieve
Teach me to follow
Each breath I heave
My heart is hollow
Loth to receive
Sleep from my pillow
Loth to perceive
Green of the willow
Amber of eve
My path is narrow
Teach me retrieve
Promise: tomorrow
I shall believe



Falls of Rauros

would you believe:
from height and heat
such spray and sparkle
such profusion of rainbows
the perfume of moisture
clinging to rock and leaf
such powerful lullaby
water's song of descent
the Raur-roar
the Raur-rhythm
that drowns your mind
the cool, cool breath of the depth
the translucent kiss -

withdraw
retrieve your thoughts, move on:
the river awaits

Comments

( 6 comments — Leave a comment )
blslarner
Apr. 16th, 2012 07:13 pm (UTC)
There is a good deal of power in these deceptively simple lines! I love them, Virtuella!
engarian
Apr. 16th, 2012 08:12 pm (UTC)
I love these, they are very evocative.

- Erulisse (one L)
lindahoyland
Apr. 17th, 2012 04:28 am (UTC)
These are very tactile poems if that makes any sense. I felt I could feel the water
burning_night
Apr. 17th, 2012 05:41 pm (UTC)
Pale bloom of sorrow is a lovely image. There's a lot of good descriptive verse here!
huinare
Apr. 18th, 2012 07:35 pm (UTC)
These are lovely. I especially like 'Simbelmynë;' it evokes so well a sense of desolation, and also paints a wonderful picture of a flowering meadow.
foxrafer
Apr. 24th, 2012 10:48 pm (UTC)
Such great poems. I think my favorite lines are:

Teach me to grieve
Teach me to follow
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