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Untold, by Rhymer

Author: Rhymer
Title: Untold
Rating: G
Theme: Lost and found
Elements: Embarrassment
Author's Notes: I think I might need to apologise a little for this one...
Summary: "A jewel of great price had been stolen from the Citadel."
Word Count: 300 (200 + 100)

A jewel of great price had been stolen from the Citadel.

"It means war!" wailed Iorlas, an old man of Minas Tirith. "Who would dare steal from our King but a deadly enemy?" He was emptying his wardrobe, stuffing clothes into a pack. "Oh! What if it's the Elf Stone itself? That's the luck of the kingdom!"

"The King is the luck of the Kingdom," said his daughter. "I think... The stone and the crown and the sword... They are things of power, yes, but take them away, and he would still be..."

"We must flee!" Iorlas wailed.

"Ours," she said quietly.

Trumpets blared in the square. "More bad news!" Iorlas lamented. "I can’t bear it!"

His daughter opened the window, and leaned out to listen. "They're saying... Oh! The King's returned from the wilds, and the jewel has been recovered. See?" She turned back with a smile. "You were panicking over nothing."

Iorlas cleared his throat. "Er... Well. I... always knew we’d be saved when the King returned. The jewel has been recovered, eh? I bet the King hunted the thief and slew him personally. There’s a great story of mighty deeds, here, you mark my words."



Arwen’s hands felt raw with wringing. "Oh, my lord! I hardly know how to confess. While you were away, I let somebody steal..."

"Peace, beloved." Aragorn drew a wrapped bundle from beneath his weather-worn clothes. "I told you I was taking it with me. You were embroidering at the time, but have you not told me many times that elf ladies are quite capable of doing two things at once?"

A slow blush spread across Arwen's cheeks.

Taking her in his arms, Aragorn kissed her. "Fear not, beloved. We will merely announce that it has been found. Nobody will ever know."




Note: This was a real challenge! Not only am I rubbish at drabbles, I'm also someone who runs gibbering from the room whenever anyone on television does anything embarrassing, so for me, a drabble about embarrassment was about as challenging as it gets. My muse refused point blank to write an entirely serious story about embarrassment, and kept trying to produce irreverent silliness. ("Oops, silly me," said Sauron. "It was behind the couch all along.") I feel a little unhappy about how I've treated the characters, but it could have been far worse!

Iorlas is a refugee from my story A Captain and a Cause, when he was last seen as an annoying teenager in the era of Thorongil. It gave me pleasure to discover that he grew into a somewhat ridiculous old man.


( 12 comments — Leave a comment )
Nov. 16th, 2013 11:39 am (UTC)
Oh this was a joy. Such a great character to see the event through.

- Erulisse (one L)
Nov. 17th, 2013 05:44 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I approached it with trepidation, but it was very enjoyable to write. :-)
Nov. 16th, 2013 01:24 pm (UTC)
Oh, dear, and we do not know what particular jewel it was! Poor Arwen--not listening! Heh!
Nov. 17th, 2013 05:43 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I expect in reality (reality? oh well, you know what I mean) elves are excellent multitaskers, but it amused me to show Arwen being otherwise.

Nov. 16th, 2013 01:31 pm (UTC)
This was cute! I don't think you are rubbish at drabbles at all.

I think it came across really well, and not knowing exactly what jewel it was made it even funnier. But I really liked Iorlas; he kind of reminded me of Eeyore from Winnie the Pooh.

Challenges are meant to stretch us, and I think you rose to the challenge quite well!
Nov. 17th, 2013 05:39 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I find drabbles challenging because they (usually) force me to omit all the imagery and descriptions that I'm so fond of... but as you say, challenges are fun. And, yes, I guess he is rather Eeyore-ish... although maybe with a dash of Piglet thrown in, getting all panicky for no reason. :-)
Nov. 16th, 2013 03:24 pm (UTC)
That was delightful. :)
Nov. 17th, 2013 05:34 pm (UTC)
Thank you! :-)
Nov. 16th, 2013 05:42 pm (UTC)
This was not rubbish. I enjoyed it!
Nov. 17th, 2013 05:34 pm (UTC)
Thank you! :-)
Nov. 24th, 2013 05:06 am (UTC)
Loved this, it was great fun.
Nov. 25th, 2013 04:53 am (UTC)
This story made me smile.
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