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Every Breath, by Himring

Author: Himring
Title: Every Breath
Rating: PG13
Theme: Gratitude
Elements: beholden
Author's Notes: Two short monologues, rather than a dialogue. (I do write Fingon/Maedhros but this piece has no sexual content.)
Summary: Fingon has rescued his cousin Maedhros from Thangorodrim--their thoughts on the subject of obligation and gratitude.
Word Count: 100 (2 x 50)

Maedhros:

I am beholden to you in every breath I take. They call me ungrateful--do not know I battle to keep breathing.
Although you cut me free, I am tied, might sink under the weight of my obligation, but choose the tie that holds me up and breathe for you.

Fingon:

Were you but free! I saved you at great cost, yet ask no recompense but this: keep breathing.  You lean too lightly against me, let me hold you up! Let who will talk of ingratitude--I will deny all obligation and be beholden to you for every breath you take.

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shirebound
Nov. 27th, 2016 05:43 pm (UTC)
This is beautifully written.
hhimring
Nov. 28th, 2016 10:17 pm (UTC)
Thank you very much, Shirebound!
lignota
Nov. 27th, 2016 07:16 pm (UTC)
I like this! It's very poetic. It reminds me of a sestina -- the way you use the same elements in a different order.
hhimring
Nov. 28th, 2016 10:20 pm (UTC)
Thank you! Glad you like it!

I've been thinking, maybe it's a bit like a duet in an opera--singing in harmony, although according to the libretto they can't actually hear what the other is saying or thinking...
periantari
Dec. 16th, 2016 03:25 am (UTC)
What a great look into what the elves may be thinking at that crucial time.
hhimring
Dec. 16th, 2016 11:06 pm (UTC)
Thank you very much! Glad that their thoughts seemed convincing!
blslarner
Jan. 1st, 2017 07:53 pm (UTC)
Oh, but very lovely!
hhimring
Jan. 2nd, 2017 09:11 pm (UTC)
Thank you very much, Larner!
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