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Mar. 16th, 2009

Author: Celeritas
Title: One Breath of Air
Rating: G
Theme: Ides of March
Elements: Starter sentence (turned into a finisher): "The sun broke through the darkness, sweeping the gloom away, if only for an instant."
Author's Notes: For most of March 15 (at least on the Pelennor) the sun is shining. But people often think that to deities, days are mere seconds. So a second's interference can have much more lasting an effect than one would think...
Summary: A conversation on Taniquetil c. March 14, T.A. 3019
Word Count: 264

Arien has been in mourning these past few days.

I know. Our onetime servant seeks to swath all of Endórë in his shadow. I wish--

You wish?

Never has the temptation to resolve these ills been greater. We have already done what we may, and very nearly was that venture ruined as well.

And yet not ruined, for has not Olórin proved faithful in all that we have given him?

His task is not yet achieved.

You wish to do more, then?

I wish, but I cannot.
We cannot; you know that. Ever have we done ill when we intervene with the Children's affairs.

One breath of air, beloved.


From the south, from the mouth of the river. One mere puff.

Vanimelda, you know--

I know that there is a fleet of ships rowing up the Anduin to succour beseiged Mindolluin. I know that Arien has grieved to see the fields and mountains shrouded for days. I know that the land is groaning under the strain of battle. It needs a cleansing rain from the Sea. One breath of air, Manwë, please, for me, and when the air is cleared I shall instruct my stars to shine the brighter.

Be it as you wish, beloved. I will do what is in my power. But not too much:

No, love, never too much.

And when day dawned on the fifteenth, even as Orodruin continued to belch its fumes, a wind rose from the south, scattering the shadows. The sun broke through the darkness, sweeping the gloom away, if only for an instant. Arien smiled.


( 15 comments — Leave a comment )
Mar. 16th, 2009 10:40 pm (UTC)
Ah, PERFECT! Yes, this is what is needed! Just a breath of air, and more sparkling stars. No need this time for mightier armies than Middle Earth can sustain.

Well, well done.
Mar. 17th, 2009 05:53 pm (UTC)
I think given the extent of their screwups in the first two Ages, the Valar would be very, very slow to act in the Third. But this aid was timely!
Mar. 17th, 2009 02:04 am (UTC)
I love the idea of the Valar offering some help.
Mar. 17th, 2009 05:54 pm (UTC)
Since everything else seemed to happen on March 15, I thought it'd be interesting to focus on events somewhere not recorded in the Tale of the Years. Coincidences like this (especially that wind!) don't happen naturally.
Mar. 17th, 2009 03:12 am (UTC)
Just a little breath of air, just enough!

I love this. Not intercession, not exactly, but a brief moment of grace.
Mar. 17th, 2009 05:57 pm (UTC)
I'm also imagining Varda told Earendil just where to sail so that he's be noticed by Sam a little bit later. ^_^
Mar. 17th, 2009 05:07 pm (UTC)
Hm. I liked it!
Mar. 17th, 2009 05:57 pm (UTC)
Great; I hope it was some food for thought!
Mar. 18th, 2009 12:36 am (UTC)
This was just wonderful. In particular, I loved how the personalities came through in the dialogue--particularly Varda's. :)

Lovely, lovely idea! Well done!
Mar. 19th, 2009 08:30 pm (UTC)
Excellent! I wasn't focusing too much on personalities (how does one characterize such high and distant beings as the Valar?) but I'm glad the identities of the two came through.
Mar. 19th, 2009 02:59 pm (UTC)
Sometimes a brief intervention is enough. And by now the Valar must have learned to not break continents when lending a hand;-)
Mar. 19th, 2009 08:26 pm (UTC)
After two Ages' worth of screwups they'd better have learned!
Mar. 19th, 2009 11:26 pm (UTC)
Absolutely lovely! The starter was actually the perfect ending!
Mar. 20th, 2009 06:44 pm (UTC)
Thank you so! I felt kind of odd using the starter as the finisher, but it seemed to work!
Mar. 20th, 2009 11:34 pm (UTC)
Don't feel bad about it at all, because what works, works! I have done it myself a couple times with prompts and the good thing is you got a story written!
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